As the sun rises from the dark,
Leashing away the night into oblivion,
A new day starts for us to embark,
Only to get back out into the pavilion.
No matter how hard we try, they’ll never know our name,
Left only to look ahead for a bleak shot of fame.
As we lay out who we are,
Written down on a papery trail,
The future is full of fear,
As with time, bleak chances fail.
No matter how hard we try, they’ll never know our name,
Yet waiting to be covered in mud with shame.
As the hard times set for us pass,
Digging us into palls of desolation,
Only to be risen to join the mass,
And face a life’s dreams isolation.
No matter how long we try, they’ll never know our name,
Left only with luck to enter the mainframe.
And Thanks to Mou, I made two sentences shorter than what they are!]
Dude..... ur poem ends with really cool tags........
loved this one......
Theyll never know our name....
cool one man!!
A stimulating thought!
And amazing execution!!
A very beautiful poem indeed!!! :)
good one.
a true thought.
simple and poetic.
They will never know our names.....Made me think but kind of pessimistic don't you think? :(
woh ! my blog's the interesting one for the moment ! thank you pawan!
nice poem.. but i agree with choco !
pessimistic !
i m still waiting for the sunnier poem.
and yea...
thanx for the "thanx" ;)
oooooooo man! pain of ur leg went 2 ur head or what? why r u so anxious? i know ur name 4 sure, othrs know it too:)
jus kidding.. nice poem buddy as alwez.. this time got it in 2 reads only.. um gtting better at tht i blive ;)
As we lay out who we are,
Written down on a papery trail,
nice lines..
keep thm cuming!
It is a lovely poem. You have to focus more on your emotions though. You have really strong emotions but you need to see what is more important and put it there. I love the choice of your words...been meaning to write to you before. Anyway, keep going. I enjoy reading them.
lovely ... phenomenal ... and fantastic ... nothing else will do !!
very nice.....
getting better and better....
WOW! Lovely one Pawan!
Really liked the choice of words..and I felt the emotion flowing through this poem.
Good one. :)
Why? Why will they not know your name?
"The future is full of fear,
As with time, bleak chances fail."
So pessimistic man! Let the darkness give way to light!
Visited ur blog for the first time nd i really find it amazing. Your hard work, all your emotions really reflects out in evry of ur posts.
Best Wishes,
Prabhjot
@Apurv: Thanks man!
Maybe I should say that, this could be considered as a song because I gave it a tune too!
@Shilpa: Thanks!
@ Shankar: A true thought?
It is a true fact mate!
And thanks for your patronage and keep coming back!
@Choco: Pessimistic? Well, I think they will never know our names because the situations are like that!
Or maybe I might be pessimistic!
Love it!! Its super! =) Keep writing!
@Mou: Your blog was really interesting and I thought that it would be good If I mentioned it out there!
And as for the poem being pessimistic, please do refer to the comment I made above! :D
I am planing for a sunnier poem but my mind is out of words! It looks like I can imagine only the dark!
@ Vipul: The pain n my leg went into the drain but not into my brain :P
I am not being anxious, I am being sad, that the world we have has no more space in the offering for us. It's real hard to get to the top. That may seem anxious to you but its sad for me!
As for the two lines you mentioned, I meant them to be, a person writes his CV on a paper and submits to a company unknowing of what lays ahead!
With your patronage, I will sure be writing more and more of poetry!
@ Teja: Thanks! I shall follow your word of advice keeping in mind, you were the inspiration fr me to take up poetry.
But it sure does take time, hence keep visiting!
Cheers!
@Subhayan: Thanks mate!
@ Anil : Thanks man!.
@Thought world: Glad that you liked it!
@ Chiranjib: They will never know my name as I do not posses any quality for them to know my name. That saddens me!
Lets hope for the lighting part though.
@ Prabhot: Thanks man and welcome to my blog. Do keep visiting over again and leave your footprints to show that you care!
@ Esther: Welcome to my blog!
Took a glimpse at your blog and I loved it!
And keep visiting over again!
well this time its a honest comment so plz dont feel bad k,
well pawan i just couldn't feel the soul in this, couple of lines were rgt on target, like arrows in the heart but something was missing, bring it back next time awaiting, at my email id is thousifraza@gmail.com
i too updated the blog hope to see ya there soon, take care
hi pawan..... sorry i could not blog last week..here i am back....nice poem again..
left only with luck to enter the mainframe....good one...
i hope your problem is rectified now...the one you told about blogging last week....
A very beautiful poem, indeed! Keep writing...
Really beautiful Pawan.
@ Thousif: Thanks for the honest comment mate!
I have written the poem with a different meaning and hence it can be tough understanding and visualizing!
I will go through your blog over the weekend and leave my comments up there!
@Shankar: Missed you Maet! Thanks about the poem and the problem was fixed in a gusto and thanks for your concern!
@ Roshmi: Thanks
@Jenny Mac: Thank you Jenny!
Will be dropping by your blog soon!
It's really a gr8 one.. :)
cheers!!!